Introduction
Metruis on Nov. 20, 2008
I think the page says everything. For further reference, a link to the original comic: Between Places is here. It has a decent sized archive, however, out of what is currently posted and labled as such, chapter twoand chapter three will only be edited if narration and dialogue for consistancy is required, and perhaps minor art changes. Of course, some reordering will be done. An explanation of the reordering Between Places will face will eventually be posted. It is what is currently labled as chapter one that will be hit hard by editing, and therefore what you should read if you're interested in being involved with this critique project, though I will make an effort to link to pages being referenced and display the art and dialogue over here as well.
Keep in mind there is a reason I'm presenting chapter one for editing in such a way–it's because it's BAD and I want imput.
Thanks, and I hope you enjoy following this comic project!
Welcome to Between Places WIP, or–how not to do a fantasy comic, and how to try to fix it after you've made a whole lot of mistakes, somehow have people reading it and a crappy beginning that even your mother doesn't like though it probably doesn't help that mom reads fantasy and knows what sucks too.
Metruis at 12:41AM, Dec. 19, 2008
Yep! Hiya, JillyFoo. :) I'm just getting the massive Chapter One WIP up and posted! :D
JillyFoo at 6:53PM, Dec. 5, 2008
Hmmm so this your critique site eh?
Metruis at 2:09AM, Nov. 21, 2008
Yeah, going back and fixing things IS hard, especially when you have as much wrong as I have! (flails and dies) See, I already 'fixed' the first two pages with their horrible art, but then I realized the writing was bad too! I have an unnatural amount of constructive critics who've given me LOOONG comments, and when I say long, I mean long... which is why I'm doing it like this. For them, you see. They want me to begin it right as much as I do. So... goin' back and fixing things, publically. Oh well. HTML was easy. I just ripped my ComicGenesis page, changed up the tags to the Drunk Duck ones for navigation and making the page appear and tweaked a few things to drop in the comment box and all. I already had the site, though honestly, I kind of like this one better, without my ugly banner on top. ^_^ I'm goin' for it! This should be interesting! Hope to see you around!
ipokino at 2:00AM, Nov. 21, 2008
Fun to see a work in progress. The effort of going back and 'fixing' things is HARD! You've done a great job on the HTML for this site page. Go for it!
Metruis at 1:35AM, Nov. 21, 2008
Just testing this commenty thingy to get a feel for the layout...